Andres Felipe Wilches Torres 1101
Miguel Angel Arboleda Salamanca
IS THERE A LOT OF HOMOPHOBIC PEOPLE IN COLOMBIA?
The homophobia exists since we have knowledgement, or since some religions (Ex: Cristianism) conquer most part of the world, in some of those cases the clerics, and most of the people that follow this belief, always had a racism (homophobia) to the gays, they believe that the gays are sinners, it is for them an abomination, because they think that god creates the man with the woman, and not the man with the man, and neither the woman with the woman, because the bible says that is an abomination that a man have sex with other man, and same with two girls.
But nowadays, the world has changed a lot, the last century some things changed, ex; the woman begins to take a paper in the world, too the childhood, most of the countries of Africa become independent, and since that period, the gays begin to make part of the society, as them are. Nowadays are like 14 countries that accept the gay marriage, and the most possible think is that all or most of the countries accept this.
In the article "(http://www.eltiempo.com/politica/partidos-politicos/entrevista-a-gina-parody-y-cecilia-alvarez/16624792)" that talk about the homophobia in Colombia, Gina Parodi (GP) and Cecilia (her wife) count about their life and how they tell this love history or her "get out of the closet" to her parents (and there were very religious), when she (GP) count this to her parents they take her to the church, the priest ask to her,"What to you have?", she said "I love a woman". The priest doenst say anithing. So because of this, the parents in the beginnig suport them, but with the time, the press find out of that situation, and begin to ask her in a committee, that if she was lesbian, she say the truth, and say that she doesn't never hide again, because she wanted to defend the gay rights, and say "when a society rejects a boy that is gay, he begin of a process of hatred, and scare, insecurity and reject, that ends in a suicide, the suicide rate is very high, and Colombia Lacks of tolerance".
this video is to show her different points of view.
In conclusion, the world evolutionates and the most possible thing is that, in a future, never will be homophoic.
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I see you have a good vocabulary and grammar, and you use it widely well. Of course you should improve it, but I think you can create outstanding texts with these. However, I have to outline some mistakes on other aspects of this article: the structure and redaction. For example, the title here is IS THERE A LOT OF HOMOPHOBIC PEOPLE IN COLOMBIA?, so the reader would expect the writting to solve specifically and tersely this issue. You give information, right, but not to complete the aim. Also, I note you mentioned the liberation of some African countries as part of the new world's changes, but I don't see clerly how this link with the theme. Therefore, take in count all these advices and try to prepare a better text the next time.
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