Andres Wilches Miguel Arboleda 1101
Instituto Pedagogico NacionalMiguel Angel Arboleda SalamancaAndres Felipe Wilches TorresCurso: 1101
The Perfect City
Civilians in Colombia continue to suffer serious abuses perpetrated by guerrillas, as well as by successor groups to paramilitaries that emerged after an official paramilitary demobilization process a decade ago. Violence associated with Colombia’s internal armed conflict has forcibly displaced more than 6.8 million Colombians, generating the world’s second largest population of internally displaced persons (IDPs) after Syria. Human rights defenders, trade unionists, journalists, indigenous and Afro-Colombian leaders, and other community activists face death threats and violence, but perpetrators are rarely held accountable.
Now a days a perfect city is like an utopy, its impossible to hand on with all the problems that may have a society (insecurity, racism, well structure, corruption.. etc) but we can think in something similiar.
our perfect city is one where everyone can be free, for example places where the people can do whatever them wants, a place where the security is very important, the people is tolerant and respects everything from the other, a place where the racism was abolished, is a place where the thing are non expensive.
A city where things are not so expensive, where parents have more time for their children, where anyone contaminate the environment.
Hello guys!
ResponderEliminarYou did a great job. It`s very interesting the topic that you tried to explain, the final of the text has a good message. I see small mistakes, the first one is that in some parraphs you didn`t use capital letters to start. The second one is about the structure. The connection between the first and the second parraph is not clear, because you started talking about the conflict, and then you told about the perfect city.
Try to think better your ideas, but you did a great job.
Greets.
Aneth.