POKEMON GO
Well, I
really do not like Pokemon, but recently Pokemon Go became a really
controversial theme to talk about, because I know that is a really good game,
and makes you go outside and walk and walk and walk. It’s a kind of good
exercise but recently this game cause lots of accidents, because people do not
see other thing that it’s not in their cellphones and some of them get crashed
by cars. Other people have been stolen because they no notice about the bad neighborhoods
that this game take them. Others fall into a hole in the ground and other just
fall in the sidewalk. However I still think that is a good game to exercise the
body, and in the actuality that is the only way to make that the people who is
addicted to videogames do some little exercise. In the social media Pokemon go explode
so hard, and people do not wait to make some parodies, one who I really like
was the video of a youtuber who calls Casey Neistat, and is a video about Pokemon
go in the real life this video has lots of views and he made it with another
youtuber who I too like and he calls Shonduras. Finally I think that big
companies must create more games like this but with some other themes.
Oh my god, that's such an excelent blog. The best I've read so far honestly. Your grammar is good, your sentences are well structurated and also you use a mayor diversity of words than before. However, there is a crucial error: the main theme is our city. So it would have been good if you had centered this writting on it. Try to take this in mind. There are some mistakes too, I point them out on the text.
ResponderEliminarGooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood work! Now you have improved!
Oh my god, that's such an excelent blog. The best I've read so far honestly. Your grammar is good, your sentences are well structurated and also you use a mayor diversity of words than before. However, there is a crucial error: the main theme is our city. So it would have been good if you had centered this writting on it. Try to take this in mind. There are some mistakes too, I point them out on the text.
ResponderEliminarGooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood work! Now you have improved!