PEÑALOSA OR PETRO -WHO IS BETTER?
- Mateo Ramirez Becerra
- Carlos Martinez Benitez
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He created the Sistem Integrated Of Transport (SITP), himself propose as politics of government preserve the wetlands of Bogota city and made an plan for the preservation of water for the warming global in Bogota, reduced the use the water in Bogota.
He assist various intervertions in the Bronx street with the police national for the confiscation of arms and ilegal drugs
Well, in a general view I can understand and comprehend what are you trying to describe about the Petro's role. But there are a few mistakes which need be corrected in a significantly way. For example, the title introduce your text into a contrast between the Petro and Peñalosa goverments with the objetive of choose which one is better, but I only can see a description about Petro. You may have been run out of time, surely, but be careful! Another things that you can improve also are in grammar and writting, creating the more understanding sentences and having in count issues related with nouns and adjetives, or articles.
ResponderEliminarJust check some english rules and the next time you will be improving your text.
Cheers mate :)